Your outline begins with an effective claim, which is the firt part of your thesis. Remember that you need a reason/reasons to support this claim. This reason must come from your secondary sources, which are missing from this outline??? Unfortunately, your main points in this outline are simply summuaries of each of the primary sources of which there is only 3? I explained this in class. Your main points, each of which will become a body paragraph of your research paper, MUST focus on an aspect of jock masculinity you noticed in the 4 primary sources you found in GQ. The primary sources themselves are EXAMPLES of your main points. For example, one main point could be what you mention in the second sentence you mention after your thesis- sports are the ultimate past time for masculine men. How do your primary sources support this point? This outline needs a substantial amount of work.
Your outline begins with an effective claim, which is the firt part of your thesis. Remember that you need a reason/reasons to support this claim. This reason must come from your secondary sources, which are missing from this outline??? Unfortunately, your main points in this outline are simply summuaries of each of the primary sources of which there is only 3? I explained this in class. Your main points, each of which will become a body paragraph of your research paper, MUST focus on an aspect of jock masculinity you noticed in the 4 primary sources you found in GQ. The primary sources themselves are EXAMPLES of your main points. For example, one main point could be what you mention in the second sentence you mention after your thesis- sports are the ultimate past time for masculine men. How do your primary sources support this point? This outline needs a substantial amount of work.
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