Friday, October 8, 2010

Post 4 : Final Draft.

https://docs.google.com/document/edit?id=1wiM-BvwWulDhEYIWGWn7g5-u3KWQeTZ-Hx0ZMHt7-WE&hl=en&authkey=CN6WpbAO

1 comment:

  1. Peer revision Jerome House Score=15

    I enjoyed reading your paper you addressed some very important points. I feel as if you should have went more indept of how retro-sexuality important to modern day men. Also you could explain how common men can acheive this particular masculinity. There were some grammical errors to watch out for such as puntuation marks. Futher more your inconclusion could have been more detailed and reinforced some of your key points.

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